Talk:Pink whipray/GA1
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 22:55, 9 November 2011 (UTC)
Looking good- nice to see a strong lead image this time! Some thoughts-
- Futuna is a dablink
- fixed
- Second common name worth mentioning in the lead? Also, perhaps bold the specific name? Also, "Another common name for this species is Tahitian stingray" - the Tahitian stingray?
- "Tahitian stingray" isn't as common as "pink whipray", since it refers to just a small part of its very wide overall range. Also, I don't know if the is right to use here.
- I think bolding should be limited to where absolutely necessary, otherwise it's distracting
- "the 'uarnak'" Why single quotes?
- No reason; got rid of the quotes and italicized instead, which I think makes more sense
- Template:Multiple image may be something to have a play with.
- I prefer to use that template only when two images are meant to be linked together; here they're just close incidentally
- What would be the effect of the sting?
- No specific info, though I assume the same as for any other stingray injury
- "When retained, the meat, skin, and cartilage are utilized." More info?
- The source doesn't give any more
- A source on the image page of File:Himantura fai rangemap.png would be good. I know there's one in the article, so this shouldn't be an issue
- Added
- The formatting on "Manjaji, B.M. (2004). Taxonomy and phylogenetic systematics of the Indo-Pacific Whip-Tailed Stingray genus Himantura Müller & Henle 1837 (Chondrichthyes: Myliobatiformes: Dasyatidae). Unpublished Ph.D. Thesis, University of Tasmania." is a little odd. Perhaps you could use the format= parameter to include "(PhD thesis)" or something akin? I don't know. Is this a particular style that you are following?
- Edited it a little bit to match APA style
- "McCoy, B. (2008). Varying impact of human feeding on Pink Whiprays, Himantura fai, at two sites on Mo'orea. UCB Moorea Class: Biology and Geomorphology of Tropical Islands, Berkeley Natural History Museum, UC Berkeley." Again, odd formatting- no quotemarks?
- Added quotes; otherwise the format matches what's suggested at the link
- Can we have a year of description category? Category:Fish of the Indian Ocean? Category:Fish of Australia (and other relevant locational ones?)
- Added the ones suggested, but not year of description because I think they're trivial
Looking nice- well written, and there are a number of interesting elements to this species. J Milburn (talk) 23:22, 9 November 2011 (UTC)
- Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 02:39, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
- Taking another look, I'm not seeing any issues; this one seems particularly well-polished. I'm promoting now- great work, as usual! J Milburn (talk) 12:17, 18 November 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. -- Yzx (talk) 17:00, 18 November 2011 (UTC)
- Taking another look, I'm not seeing any issues; this one seems particularly well-polished. I'm promoting now- great work, as usual! J Milburn (talk) 12:17, 18 November 2011 (UTC)