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Reviewer: Vensatry (talk · contribs) 09:26, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • I'll be reviewing this article. Will provide my first set of comments soon. —Vensatry (Ping me) 09:26, 5 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • I've read the article and my initial impression is that it's very much close to the GA stuff. However, there are a few issues issues and clarifications that needs to be sorted out before I pass the article.

Initial comments

  • He played his last match for Yorkshire County Cricket Club in 1946 and not 1946
  • "Wisden" must be italicised in "Wisden Cricketer of the Year" and refs #71 and #72
  • Link Harrogate, Australia in 1928–29, Australia in 1932–33, Australia in England in 1934, innings and Lancashire
  • Done all but Lancashire. The team is linked, and linking the physical county is, in my view, overlinking.

Sarastro1 (talk) 21:12, 12 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • "debut that year against West Indies", we normally say the West Indies
  • "He held his place until 1938 when he was replaced in the team by younger batsmen, but recalled for the final match of the series, he scored 187, his highest Test score in what became his final match." This sentence can be broken down as it seems too lengthy
  • A definition of "professional cricketer" could be given

--—Vensatry (Ping me) 19:34, 12 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

*I cannot find any link to professional cricketer. We define "amateur cricketer" in few articles but I don't see what a professional cricketer would actually mean to a non-cricket fan. You could add a note. —Vensatry (Ping me) 14:40, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the reason there is no link is that it is pretty clear. What would the note say: "a person who plays cricket for a living?" That is what professional means, so there is no need to explain it. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:44, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Test match cricketer
  • The stuff explaining Leyland's wife looking after Sutcliffe's children is really significant?
  • Link The Times
Because I'm an idiot. Fixed now! Sarastro1 (talk) 21:36, 15 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "He scored 137, his first Test century, and 53 not out", you mean second innings?
  • "and reached 50 first-class wickets at an average of 30.26". It was for the season or overall
  • 1228 runs -> 1,228 runs
Test regular
  • Against Oxford he took eight wickets in the game, which game are you referring to? I would suggest you to rewrite the sentence as it's a little confusing
  • I see a problem of underlinking in the article. In addition to the above mentioned ones, a link to South Africa, New Zealand and 1930 Ashes series can be made.
  • Don't Pipe link "South African cricket team in England in 1929" to just South Africa, link it to "five matches against South Africa that summer" or something like that. Even I'm not keen on linking the cricket teams. But linking tours would be more helpful to the reader —Vensatry (Ping me) 15:54, 15 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not sure if "Yorkshire v Lancashire" is acceptable encyclopedic wise
  • In all first-class matches he scored 2,175 runs at an average of 50.58, the first time he reached 2,000 runs in a season,[7] and took 53 wickets at 27.92 -> which season?
  • but was not selected any off the three-Test series between England and New Zealand. Preposition missing in the sentence
General
  • Leyland being named the Wisden Cricketer of the Year is not mentioned anywhere in the article except the lead.
  • The article makes an extensive use of high-quality book sources. Any reason for not linking the short citations. It would be much helpful the reader.
  • You could clarify certain technical terms like "short-pitched bowling".

—Vensatry (Ping me) 14:40, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments so far. Sarastro1 (talk) 18:58, 14 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Last years as a cricketer
  • "He was not selected for the first Tests against Australia", not sure what do you mean by "first Tests"
  • "as of 2013, it remains England's highest partnership for the second wicket in all Test matches". I think no need to repeat this since the first part clearly mentions it to be a Test match
Later life
  • Unnecessary period after chief coach
  • Any specific reason for his death?

—Vensatry (Ping me) 15:54, 15 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oddly enough, it is never explicitly stated. The implication in most sources is that it was Parkinson's disease which killed him, but they never say so outright. And I'm not sure that Parkinson's would have been the cause anyway. So I'm afraid I don't know. Sarastro1 (talk) 21:36, 15 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

'Another version was the Leyland believed...' : 'the' should be 'that' — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2A02:A03F:804D:1400:B056:D297:42FD:2BD9 (talk) 23:06, 20 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Images
  • Alt text needed for infobox image

—Vensatry (Ping me) 19:24, 15 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Check against the criteria

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
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