Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO): Done
Major Point 1: Freshman "He did not play organized basketball until eighth grade, but by late in his freshman season he became a notable contributor to his high school's varsity team". (summarised well in the lead)
Major Point 2: Sophomore "He has been ranked among the top 20 prospects in the national class of 2014 since prior to his sophomore season although he started slowly as a freshman.". (summarised well in the lead)
Major Point 3: Junior "" None. (The lead is not a concise summary of the content in the body)
Major Point 4: Senior "He has given a verbal commitment to the Kansas University men's basketball team and will be a freshman for the 2014–15 team." summarises only Summer and preseason and it's not concise. (The lead is not a concise summary of the content in the body)
Major Point 5: Comparisons "" None. (The lead is not a concise summary of the content in the body)
Check for Relative emphasis: Done
Major Point 1: Freshman (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
Major Point 2: Sophomore (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
Major Point 3: Junior (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
Major Point 4: Senior (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
Major Point 5: Comparisons (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. Overly long paragraphs should be split up, as long as the cousin paragraphs keep the idea in focus.WP:BETTER
Fix long paragraph in subsection Summer and preseason - "On September 15 Alexander ... "
Fix short paragraph in subsection Comparisons - "He is known as the type of player ... "
Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX): Done
Twitter is used as a source in 55,64,66,67,68,70,75 but self-published or questionable sources may be used as sources of information about themselves, especially in articles about themselves, without the requirement that they be published experts in the field.
"NO ORDER❗❗❗ TOP 10 School Kansas, Michigan state, Kentucky, Louisville, Illinois, DePaul, Indiana, Memphis, Baylor, Arizona NO ORDER"[55]
" perhaps the most powerful player in the high school ranks".[4]
"My top 6 schools NO ORDER Michigan state, Illinois, Memphis, DePaul, Kansas, Arizona".[64]
"...can shoot the 15-footer, put it on the floor, post moves, sets good screens."[52]
Check for Likely to be challenged: Done (cited well)
For instance:
He is known[who?] as a powerful big man.[4]
Following his freshman season, Alexander began to be recognized by local evaluators as a potential top national recruit.[11]
After Jabari Parker and Jahlil Okafor, Alexander was already considered the best Chicago area basketball prospect.[6]
However, as Alexander entered his sophomore season, he was one of three area prospects that were firmly among the national class of 2014's top 25 prospects (along with Whitney M. Young Magnet High School teammates Okafor and Paul White).[16]
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Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): Done
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A rough analysis of Relative emphasis and due weight for this article could be as given below.
The body of the article is of 2500 words approximately. The distribution of words among sections and subsections is:
High school career (2400 words)
Freshman (200 words)
Sophomore (200 words)
Junior (700 words)
Senior (1100 words)
Summer and preseason (900 words)
2013-14 regular season (200 words)
Comparisons (200)
International play (60 words)
The percentage distribution of words is:
High school career (96% of 2500 words)
Freshman (8% of 2500 words)
Sophomore (8% of 2500 words)
Junior (28% of 2500 words)
Senior (44% of 2500 words)
Summer and preseason (36% of 2500 words)
2013-14 regular season (8% of 2500 words)
Comparisons (8% of 2500 words)
International play (2.5% of 2500 words)
Lets assume the lead is about 10% of the body. The number of words in the lead would be around 250. Considering the percentage distribution and the due weight, the distribution of words in the lead would be:
High school career (96% of 250 words = 240)
Freshman (8% of 250 words = 20)
Sophomore (8% of 250 words = 20)
Junior (28% of 250 words = 70)
Senior (44% of 250 words = 110)
Summer and preseason (36% of 250 words = 90)
2013-14 regular season (8% of 250 words = 20)
Comparisons (8% of 250 words = 20)
International play (2.5% of 250 words = 7)
The lead representative of the body should roughly give due weight in terms of the proportion as is given below:
High school career (240 words)
Freshman (20 words)
Sophomore (20 words)
Junior (70 words)
Senior (110 words)
Summer and preseason (90 words)
2013-14 regular season (20 words)
Comparisons (20 words)
International play (7 words)
I'm giving you a very rough analysis of relative emphasis and due weight which I hope would be useful in conveying my expectations, as a GA reviewer, of a good lead. The lead should approximate my analysis. If you feel I'm wrong anywhere, feel free to correct me or ignore the suggestions altogether. --Seabuckthorn♥19:16, 12 January 2014 (UTC)Reply
Apologies. Ignore the example altogether. But do you agree that the lead needs to be expanded for it to provide an accessible overview and give relative emphasis? --Seabuckthorn♥23:24, 12 January 2014 (UTC)Reply