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User:Inflatable Turtle/Creation Myth by Tom Otterness/Pizzaswallower2024 Peer Review

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Inflatable Turtle

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Inflatable%20Turtle/Creation_Myth_by_Tom_Otterness?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

same link as above

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead lays out information nicely and reads well, but is slightly wordy. Content is relevant and up to date given the time that the sculptures were created. The tone of the article doesn't feel exactly neutral, and suggest bias toward a certain perspective. For example the phrase "seem unassuming in nature and easily approachable" leans toward a particular view. The article is still informational and provides a clear depiction of the sculptures. For the major topics, there isn't much organization yet (headings and such) but that's just a temporary issue. Lit review is cited thoroughly and straightforward. Overall, well structured paragraphs and a great read!